Crowding at the bar
The pressure of others.
Nose twitches.
That fragrance in the air,
That diverse, spicy blend
A momentary shock
Dropping under dark water
I’m back there
In that place
With you
Clarity undimmed by time
Regret magnified
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This was written for Secret Keeper’s weekly prompt, using the words – pressure – diverse – fragrance – clarity – shock http://thesecretkeeper.net/2015/09/21/writing-prompt-3/
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Where all this comes from, nobody nose
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created in some ol’ factory I suppose
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I’m going to stop there. My next comment would probably stink anyway…
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I think I enjoyed the conversation above as much as I enjoyed your poem. 😀
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All entertainments catered for here!
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😀
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Oh Wowza, what a poem!!
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Thank you – I don’t try free verse very often, so I’m glad you liked it!
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Yep, I did.
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🙂
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It’s amazing how our sense of smell can ‘Chanel’ memories. Wonderful poem.
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Ha ha! Thanks Olga 🙂
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What a beautifully written poem. I love the way you flow with your wordings and use of the 5 words writing prompt. Just brilliant. I went for the short fiction. But I like your idea of trying for a Haiku. You may have inspired me with that thought. We’ll see for both of us what we end up doing. Maybe a Tanka. It gives you two extra lines with 7 syllables in each line. I would like to add, you are a natural with free verse. jk 🙂
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Thank you, jk. I’m never comfortable with free verse… I think in rhyme and haiku at the moment. But I could maybe stretch to a tanka as well 🙂
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I prefer Haiku as you do. That is why Tanka works well as an alternative. When I am inspired while writing and I get in a rhythm, I find I tend to end up rhyming myself, also. It gives a certain powerful feel to the words and the end result is often a power based poem. 🙂
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