Lying here to rest
Lying here to rest
Comfortably numb
Comfortably numb
Comfortably lying
To rest here, numb
Hoping forever
Hoping forever
Love will never end
Love will never end
Never, forever
Hoping love will end
Apathy in boredom, cycles
Apathy in boredom, cycles
Black holes of hope
Black holes of hope
Apathy in hope
Black holes; cycles of boredom
Black holes of love
Lying here and hoping
Forever numb
To never rest comfortably
Boredom cycles
Hope will end apathy
A very complicated challenge today… not sure about this at all!
A Certain Point of View 
You seem to have completed the challenge very ably. Not sure I undtood he challenge, though
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Thanks… I’m still not so sure 🙂
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I am typing too fast! Sorry, I’m pleased you understood me.
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I will explore this method another time. I just write: no idea what type of poetry it is!
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Me too generally, but I’m trying to give every prompt a go this month, for better or worse!
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Interesting and has the wee rodent inside my brain, running like a champ on that wheel…. I like it a lot
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Thank you… don’t expect any more in this style from me though! This was a struggle…
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It’s brilliant and I am so honored that you mastered the challenge!
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I like the poem . It is not a style that I am familiar with though 🙂
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Me either. And I don’t think I’m going to take the time to become more familiar either… this was a struggle!
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Ha! Well at least you did it! You can go back to writing whatever style you want to now, plus you have learned a few more on the course. It looked really good 🙂
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🙂
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I was so glad to see someone do the challenge. Thought I understood it, but yours made it much clearer. Now, to try it for myself. /furrowed brow sets in/
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The furrowed brow is essential for this poem, in my limited experience! I might try it again playing it purely for laughs, but won’t make a habit of it 🙂
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I just read yours… you succeeded! The furrowed brow must have helped. As well as time to actually sit and think 🙂
It’ll have to wait for another time for me!
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Oh my goodness, I’m flabbergasted–and WAY Impressed! What’s there to be unsure about, Al?
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I’ll just say I’m not a fan! 🙂
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Oh. Of the prompt’s form…or your poem today? If this is too many questions, you don’t need to reply 🙂
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A bit of both… a lot of effort for middling reward… oh well, at least I’ve tried it!
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Well, I hate to argue with you–but the results are hardly “middling”; I bookmarked yours and Two Paise Poems both–because I needed examples to follow IF (BIG IF) I do the prompt. Feel better? 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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You’re welcome, and thanks for giving me courage to do the prompt–it actually went pretty well 🙂
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It certainly did!
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🙂
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clap, clap! well done.
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Thanks Candy! 🙂
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Ok, I LOVE your poem.
LOVE IT
Coming from someone who struggled with mental illness a lot of her life, just know that… it made so much sense to me, in the way it didn’t make sense. If this makes sense at all 😉
Thank you for giving it a go. You did a beautiful job!
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Thanks Dawn. I tried to use a call and response style to try and bring in contrasting thoughts, like the good and bad devils that sit on our shoulders, whispering in our ears…
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🙂
You certainly managed to make the many voices that once were in my head come alive!
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I think you’ve been very clever in attempting the challenge using minimal words to make the “combined” lines and the last “combined” verse easier to write. This style definitely requires a lot of planning and thought about the end result.. you almost need to write the poem backwards.
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I think that’s why i feel cold to it – I needed to be clever, rather than a more emotional driver. And I didn’t think of writing it backwards!
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Well atleast you can say you did it 🙂 I do feel like that sometimes when I try to write structured poetry
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Fantastic!!
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Ah … so this is how it’s done … a great write!
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Thanks Bastet. This one was well out of my comfort zone!
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I can imagine … felt the same way when I tried it!
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Ha ha! It’s all good experience though 🙂
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Yes I agree … builds up ones poetic muscles 🙂
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Then this felt like a tough session in the poetry gym!
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Yeah … I had a few stiff muscles afterwards 😉
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