This is what happens when I read Kwame Alexander’s The Crossover… I try and write haiku/ three line poems on basketball!
The pressure’s intense.
One point down. Clock ticking hard.
The shot’s out of reach…
A feint, spring forward
Dribbling close, taking off…
But the attempt’s flawed.
Hang my head in shame.
Dreams of major leagues shattered.
McDonalds beckons.
Picture credit: flickr.com/photos/dahlstroms/7189993560
Written for: http://thesecretkeeper.net/2016/02/22/weekly-word-prompt-25/
Prompt words: REACH | SHOT | INTENSE | FLAW | SPRING
A Certain Point of View 
Have you ever tried Haibun? I love that form.
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I have, but I like the restriction of the haiku. It feels more of a challenge to get your message across in the fewest words! (Unless you make it into a whole sequence as I have here…)
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It’s true and for that reason I love the Haibun’s paragraphs that give me room to breathe a little.
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I’m a purist in that sense… the tighter the bind, the greater the challenge, and the greater the creativity needed 🙂
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IN that you are right.
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There’s a school for every thought! I think a haibun is a greater challenge than haiku alone. You have the challenge of the haiku and then some, by trying to form cohesion and flow with the prose…
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I disagree… I have seen them done well, but too often it’s a way around the haiku form, rather than embracing it. A haiku should be self-contained, for me. You don’t see a prose lead-up to a sonnet, so why should a haiku be different? Each to their own, but it’s just not for me 🙂
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It probably really doesn’t matter – haiku, haibun, sonnet, tanka or whatever, they are just human constructs for expressing thoughts and emotions. For me personally, the haiku structure helps to narrow the focus in my writing, otherwise it could just be any style and any length and sometimes those options are distractions, and where it is a haibun, the prose makes me really connect with the feeling or subconscious thought behind the haiku, so it’s a personal preference and difficulty/ease probably has nothing to do with it. Anyway, I enjoyed your haiku 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
Another factor for me, being honest, is time management. I spend so many hours blogging daily that I really have to draw the line somewhere, and hope there’s enough for people to connect with! Glad you did 🙂
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The comments are longer than your haiku hehe. Yes, I hear you with time management!
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Hadn’t thought of that, but you’re so right!
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Did you want fries with that?
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Ha ha!
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Hahaha, story of my life. I suck at basketball! Love it 😄
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I worry that this is a metaphor for my life at times – going for the match-winning shot… and just missing out!
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Kewl! 🙂 I have that book but I haven’t read it yet. Kwame is the most dynamic speaker though, and so upbeat, you can’t help but be inspired when you’re in his presence.
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I’m unlikely to get the pleasure in person, so I’ll have to rely on his words. Still pretty inspiring 🙂
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He likes to travel so maybe he’ll attend a SCBWI event in your part of the world?!
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I’ll suggest it this end 🙂
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I hope he’ll be invited! He has a policy of saying Yes! to all good opportunities, so I think he’ll say yes if your chapter invites him. 🙂
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LOL. 😀
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Thanks Diana! 🙂
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Ha HA! Ooooh I do love a double sausage and egg MCMuffin. so much more satisfying than basketball!
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Good option… that’s my indulgent breakfast of choice! Perfect for a hangover… 🙂
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Ha Ha! 🙂
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Once, years ago, I heard someone say:
People used to tell me, “You’re as tall as Larry Bird – you should play basketball.”
“I may be as tall as Larry Bird but I play ball like Big Bird!”
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Ha ha! They could have been talking to me!
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Ah that last line had me smiling.. lovely haiku Al. 🙂
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The golden arches rise from the foundations of broken dreams… 🙂
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Very good!! Macdonald’s will be after you to do their advertising for them..
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Ha ha! Not sure that caption would sell many Big Macs!
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They might have to start selling posh food instead!
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🙂
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A fun treat. Humor – Basketball & Haiku. Well, that is original. Good form. The conclusion – a McDonald’s Moment. It’s an obsession. You’re into Basketball – I’m into Film Awards. Each to our own obsessions. Great set of Haiku. Love them all. – jk
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Thanks jk… But I’m not even slightly into basketball. I just went with the prompts! 🙂
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Cool! Very Interesting…;)
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I am just a follower of thought, a chaser of dreams 🙂
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