The Ergonomic Limousine

This was inspired by a comment from my new friend Stella… This feels like a first draft more than a finished piece, but hope you like it 🙂

The ergonomic limousine
Pulls up at my door
Past the half-graffiti
And blood stains on the floor

I sprint out of the house,
And rush out to the street
All my problems melt away
Once I settle in the seat

The limousine purrs along
No destination set
We don’t know where we’re going
Because we haven’t thought it yet

Daydreams drift and dare us
Taking on life of their own
A hundred places rumble by
As casually we roam

From beach up to the bedroom
And later back again
Cruising down canals
Rough-riding on the train

Swooping ‘cross the sky
Climbing mountains on the moon
Exploring distant galaxies
And back for tea at noon

The ergonomic limousine
Swallows me up whole
Together we go everywhere
As it feeds upon my soul



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38 thoughts on “The Ergonomic Limousine

  1. A great piece – feels pretty finished to me!
    And I’ve just realised that there is a character that owns an ergonomic limousine, it’s just that it doesn’t look very car-like, having no wheels and the words ‘Police Box’ written on the top…

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  2. And you say it’s a draft? What makes you feel it needs anything more? I mean, it took me there, the rhythm is lovely, the rhyming… well, as usual with you, it’s there and you don’t even notice it, it’s that good. This just flows.
    A great piece Al, yet again! 🙂

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